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Ok, this topic overused. Every second video uploaded onto any site is 'comedy' complaining about new layouts or famous people. No movement besides the mouth of your crudely drawn characters. Badly drawn animation is actually acceptable on the internet but then you need to make your character move. That is my minor in my opinion. If you expected people to watch this because of the humour then you're mistaking. Write a script and spend some time on it to do clever word play and the acting isn't too good either, even for comedy. Flow into your words like you're having a conversation, it feels really forced as if you've read it off a script or made it up with uncertainty at the last moment. So here are my points...

1) More movement
2) Other topics example.
Humour Story, Funny side of daily activities, Puns or Dry humour, animate jokes you heard. Just please...not this Google+ shit.
3) Script
Don't just assume your first script is good because it's usually the worst one you come up with
4) Voice Acting
Practice by replicating successful comedians until you eventually find your own style.

Ep1cPro responds:

Thank you that was actully VERY helpful. Thank you very much

The storytelling alone deserves a five

myoneandonly responds:

Thanks a bunch!

5/5 for the animation and time you spent creating it. 1/5 for the story. Ok, the animation is great and the constant moving pictures keeps our attention but it can only go so far. Pitch together and work on a decent script by chopping and changing things. Overall it's good and would love to see more...story

Zictor responds:

Thanks for the review. I'm working out the best use of the character at the moment, it is hard to make a narrative with a clear story without dialogue, I've been adding facial expressions to him and trying to come up with funny situations to put him into rather than trying to make full on narratives as a lot of the reviews I've got are stating that the story doesn't make sense. It's still early days so I'm fairly sure he will find himself. Keep a lookout because there is more coming!

The bad sound recording completely overshadows the great animating. Storytelling is good and for some reason keeps my attention even if little movement is included.
Just that sound...it feels like a waste of animation and storytelling because of it

RadioTubeClock responds:

Thanks for the review! In the future I plan to work with another clock on balancing the voices better, hopefully that will make things more consistant.

I felt awkward watching it
Not enough effort is put into it. Ok, let me put it in perspective from the people watching it. Clunky animation, boring to watch...unless it's detailed which this one isn't, more fps or picture detail. Awkward voice, stings doesn't it? Practice your voice acting as if you were talking naturally to someone else because your words feel forced. Impersonating stand-up comedy also helps but whether we like it or not some people have to practice voice acting where others do it naturally. Awkward long no at the end, don't do that to your audience. NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.
See this as constructive criticism and creatively work on the things I just mentioned, all entertainers start out horribly. Overall Ratings

Animation: Clunky
Voice: Dull
Script: Awkward
Art: Rushed

tvgravy responds:

ok thanks man

Nice animation but the background ruined it
Like a lot of animations, this has potential to be proper entertainment. You included enough movement so you know what it takes for smooth movement but wasting that potential away on a on a storyline where a PC/MAC randomly eats a guy to symbolize a computer dominating your life isn't worth working on (I think that's what you meant with the symbolism). First write a draft, refine that draft into a better mini script and then you start working on it. Slaving away on an animation that isn't worth making is obviously a bad choice. Plan your project, good luck and enjoy the power of creativity

DylanSparano responds:

I understand what you mean about writting a story line, but wasted potential is a little harsh for an animation that is not ment to really have a storyline. It's just symbolism, but for my next animation I will use a script. Thanks for the advice.

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