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[Incident in the Alley]

The storytelling alone deserves a five

myoneandonly responds:

Thanks a bunch!

[Pip the Robot: Trapped]

5/5 for the animation and time you spent creating it. 1/5 for the story. Ok, the animation is great and the constant moving pictures keeps our attention but it can only go so far. Pitch together and work on a decent script by chopping and changing things. Overall it's good and would love to see more...story

Zictor responds:

Thanks for the review. I'm working out the best use of the character at the moment, it is hard to make a narrative with a clear story without dialogue, I've been adding facial expressions to him and trying to come up with funny situations to put him into rather than trying to make full on narratives as a lot of the reviews I've got are stating that the story doesn't make sense. It's still early days so I'm fairly sure he will find himself. Keep a lookout because there is more coming!

[Villans Are People Too]

I felt awkward watching it
Not enough effort is put into it. Ok, let me put it in perspective from the people watching it. Clunky animation, boring to watch...unless it's detailed which this one isn't, more fps or picture detail. Awkward voice, stings doesn't it? Practice your voice acting as if you were talking naturally to someone else because your words feel forced. Impersonating stand-up comedy also helps but whether we like it or not some people have to practice voice acting where others do it naturally. Awkward long no at the end, don't do that to your audience. NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.
See this as constructive criticism and creatively work on the things I just mentioned, all entertainers start out horribly. Overall Ratings

Animation: Clunky
Voice: Dull
Script: Awkward
Art: Rushed

tvgravy responds:

ok thanks man

[Chat Rooms]

Nice animation but the background ruined it
Like a lot of animations, this has potential to be proper entertainment. You included enough movement so you know what it takes for smooth movement but wasting that potential away on a on a storyline where a PC/MAC randomly eats a guy to symbolize a computer dominating your life isn't worth working on (I think that's what you meant with the symbolism). First write a draft, refine that draft into a better mini script and then you start working on it. Slaving away on an animation that isn't worth making is obviously a bad choice. Plan your project, good luck and enjoy the power of creativity

DylanSparano responds:

I understand what you mean about writting a story line, but wasted potential is a little harsh for an animation that is not ment to really have a storyline. It's just symbolism, but for my next animation I will use a script. Thanks for the advice.